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Some people prefer to live in the city,while others feel that there are more advantages to living in the countryside. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in the city comared with living in the countryside.

It is often argued that
live
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living
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 in the
city
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 and living in the
countryside
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become
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are becoming
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 one of the most pressing issues in contemporary society.
While
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 some
people
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 claim that
live
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living
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 in the
city
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 is much better,
other
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others
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 insist that
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countryside
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the countryside
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 lifestyle pros
are
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apply
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outweight
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outweigh
. In my view,
although
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 both perspectives have merit, I strongly believe that
life
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 in the
city
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give
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gives
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 more opportunities, as it
provide
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provides
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 more sustainable and rational
solution
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solutions
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. On the one hand,
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city
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cities
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 usually get more financial aid from the
goverment
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government
.
In
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According
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according to
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 the official 2024
statistic
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statistics
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, budget
allocaion
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allocation
 for the capital of Kazakhstan
was constituted
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accounted for
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 23%,
whereas
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 half number of Kazakh villages consumed only 15% of public finances. In fact, it
lead
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led
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 to the marked business growth. Lots of
people
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 are
migrate
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migrating
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 to the big cities for the ability to develop their startups and promote on
the
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a
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 bigger stage.
Moreover
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, in the
city
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 usually
much
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many
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 more
top ranked
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top-ranked
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 universities, which
is
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apply
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positively
affect
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affects
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on
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apply
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the average educational level among the citizens.
On the other hand
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,
countryside
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life
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 can attract
vary
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various
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people
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 with
the
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apply
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nature and incentives. The fact that
air
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the air
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 outside the
city
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,
due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of
manufactories
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manufacturing
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 and cars, more
fresh
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fresher
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 and
clear
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clearer
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 was scientifically proven by researchers from MIT.
Life
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 outside the
city
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allow
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allows
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to
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apply
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fusion with
the
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apply
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nature and
feel
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feels
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 free for mass of
people
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.
In addition
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, privileges from
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
,
such
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 as monthly payments and
prority
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priority
 for students in the queue for
schoolarships
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scholarships
, give a motivation for relocation. To consider all above,
althought
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although
 opposite opinions regarding
life
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 in
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city
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the city
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 and
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countryside
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the countryside
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 still persist, I'm convinced that
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city
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the city
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outweight
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outweighs
 the alternative. In the
longterm
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long term
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,
this
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 approach would bring more profound benefits for both individuals and society as a whole.
For example
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, giving preference to the
city
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 country will
gain
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help
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 their economy and able to improve
quality
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the quality
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 of
life
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content
Make your answer clear. Start with your view in the intro and keep it in all body parts.
content
Show both sides a bit more. That makes your view strong and fair.
coherence
Link ideas well. Use simple words like first, then, also, but, however to connect ideas.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use easy and exact words.
content
Give more real and clear examples or numbers to back up your points.
strength
You give the idea that city brings many chances for work and study.
strength
You try to use links to show two sides.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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