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Band 2.5

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Saving
money
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 for the
future
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essential
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is essential
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 for everyone, particularly for
young
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the young
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 generation.
While
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 some oppose
this
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 nation,
i
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I
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 personally argue in
favor
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. Saving
money
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 from an early age is essential for them, because it helps develop financial literacy and responsibility.
even
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Even
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 small savings may play a big
rol
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role
 in the
future
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 when unexpected expenses occur,
for example
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,
necessity
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the necessity
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 for medical help or home renovation.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 regular savings allow people
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to
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invest for their
future
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,
such
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 as buying a house or setting up a business.
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Thus
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 the habit of saving
money
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 will help to avoid debts and decrease stress
and
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, and
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 make people independent. But
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 we mustn't forget that
young
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the young
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 generation often
have
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has
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small
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a small
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 income
which
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, which
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 makes saving
money
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 very difficult.In
this
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age
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age,
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 sometimes it's more important to invest their
money
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for
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in
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 education or
for
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in
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 travelling
which
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, which
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 will be beneficial in the
future
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.
For instance
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 student who invested his
money
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for
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in
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 language courses or extra courses
,
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apply
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 may get
higher
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a higher
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 job with
big
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a bigger
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 income than
that
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one
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 who saved his
money
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.So
saving
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, saving
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 too much
money
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 may not provide an opportunity for self-development. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 saving
money
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 plays
significant
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a significant
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 role in financial stability.
Although
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young
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the young
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 generation can benefit more from investing their
money
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 in education and personal development,it
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also
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is also
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 essential for them to learn how to manage their
Therefore
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saving
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, saving
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money
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 should be encouraged at every age

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content
Say your view clearly in the first line and end with a short final note.
structure
Use easy linking words to show order and hold ideas together.
language
Fix grammar and use short, clear sentences.
content
Add more clear and exact examples with detail.
structure
You show a clear view and try to weigh both sides.
content
Some ideas on how saving can help later life are shown.
idea
You begin to use reasons for your claim.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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