IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Many students today graduate high school and then go to study in another country Give the advantages and disadvantages of studying overseas

Nowadays , after many changes in the strategy of education , my
students
Use synonyms
 , after graduation from high school, tend to
study
Use synonyms
 in another country. There are both advantages
Correct word choice
and
show examples
disadvantages. Both of them are very important to discuss.
This
Linking Words
 assay will mention both points of view. On the one hand, in terms of advantages, there are many common advantages .
First,
Linking Words
studying in another country is a wonderful personal experience . Many studies confirmed that 90% of
students
Use synonyms
 feel well when they work hard outside of their comfort zone .
For
Linking Words
example
Use synonyms
, high confidence and high social intelligence are the best positive points .
Second,
Linking Words
studying outside is a wonderful learning experience. It helps them to learn more than
study
Use synonyms
 .
For
Linking Words
example
Use synonyms
, cooking food , solving problems and saving money .
According to
Linking Words
 Kuwait College published
study
Use synonyms
, 70% of
students
Use synonyms
 have a stronger learning experience
due to
Linking Words
 studying outside the city.
Finally
Linking Words
, studying outside creates a powerful life.
For
Linking Words
example
Use synonyms
, it helps
students
Use synonyms
 save themselves.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, in terms of disadvantages ,
firstly
Linking Words
, preventing the family gathering is a famous disadvantage .
For
Linking Words
example
Use synonyms
,
students
Use synonyms
 lose the happy time in Ramadan and Eid .
According to
Linking Words
 a Bahraini academic
study
Use synonyms
, 70%؜ of
students
Use synonyms
 feel sad
due to
Linking Words
 the prevention of the family party .
Secondly
Linking Words
, the high
cost
Use synonyms
 is a hard disadvantage .
For
Linking Words
example
Use synonyms
, the high
cost
Use synonyms
 of living, the rising
cost
Use synonyms
 of food and the increasing
cost
Use synonyms
 of books.
Finally
Linking Words
, the overthinking is the affective action.
For
Linking Words
example
Use synonyms
,
students
Use synonyms
 who feel stressed and eat too much, especially if they have a hard exam.
This
Linking Words
 will affect their brain. In conclusion, increasing the positive aspect and decreasing the negative aspect will improve the positive points with a better future.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task
Plan a short intro that states the topic and your view. Make a map of main ideas to talk in body parts.
structure
Write a clear topic sentence for each paragraph and keep facts or ideas in order.
content
Give real and simple examples to support each point. Use easy facts you can check.
task
Stay on the task. Do not add things not asked in the prompt.
coherence
Use small linking words (and, but, also, then, finally) to show how ideas go together.
content
Shows each side of the idea.
structure
Has an intro and a conclusion.
language effort
Attempts to use data or facts to back points.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: