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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Individuals often debate whether to become friends with
someone
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 who shares similar ideology or
someone
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 who opposes their decision by being bluntly honest
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 and proposes a different perspective. Both sides present strong arguments, which will be discussed in
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 essay. I will
also
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 explain why I believe that having friends who may have opposite beliefs will be more beneficial.
Firstly
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, having a
friend
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 with whom your
behavior
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 and hobbies are synchronised will create a long-lasting, non-argumentative friendship. People often bond more with
someone
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 who shares similar opinions. The main reason behind
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 is that, in some cases, it leads to long companionship starting from kindergarten to college, having similar interests. After having been through a long journey through life, Beliefs shared are not bluntly questioned and lead to a less objectionable resolution, which may result in a pleasing journey.
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, having a
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 with a different viewpoint is more crucial and provides a wide range of options. Without
someone
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 to argue with, deciding on some critical aspect of your personal life or professional life, an important decision will have a shortage of prudent moves.
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, the Same thing applies
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 running a government. Without capable opposition, policies taken
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 effect may have some loopholes or require additional research. In conclusion,
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 I believe having a
friend
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 with either mindset is required, I firmly believe that a good
friend
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 with a different point of view is more helpful.
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, having even a single
friend
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 on whom you can trust for an honest opinion about any of your private decisions is more critical.

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task response
Task response: show a clear view in the intro and end with your clear opinion. Give reason for your view and small examples to back it up.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: group ideas in clear paragraphs. Use easy link words to show how ideas move from one idea to the next. Keep each paragraph to one main idea plus a small reason.
structure
The piece shows a plan: intro, two body ideas, and a conclusion.
content
It tries to discuss both views and give a view of the writer.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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