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The map below shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The maps illustrate changes in the rural village of Rye
mouth
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Mouth
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 between 1995 and the present.
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, a comparison of two maps reveals a lot of transformations which everyone
could
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can
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 easily observe
them
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apply
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. In the year 1995, the countryside area consisted of forest park, farmland, housing and some buildings to
service
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serve
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for
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apply
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people
,
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;
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however
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however,
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 during the years, the village saw a number of
signigicant
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significant
 changes. The most
noticable
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noticeable
 developments related to the east side of the Rye mouth
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, which
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which
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where
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 a number of trees were chopped down to build
new
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a new
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 tennis court
and
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, and
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 farmland
transformed
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was transformed
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to
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into
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golf
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a golf
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 area.
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, some private houses and
road
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roads
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 were demolished
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that where
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where
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were
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 located
in
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on
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 the
west
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western
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 side of the village.
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, there are some actions which has essential for citizens’ lifestyle. First and foremost, the cafe and hotel in the
southest
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southeast
 have remained unchanged,
although
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 a car park was added beside the hotel. On top of that, there are some changes which demand to pay attention in the south-west
like
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, like
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shop
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the shop
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 area transformed
to
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into
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restaurant
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a restaurant
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as
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, as
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 well as
fish
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the fish
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 market converted into apartments. The fishing port was
also
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consturcted
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constructed
 at the mouth of the river.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • transformation
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • commercial development
  • public services
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • economic growth
  • lifestyle changes
  • quality of life
  • sustainability
  • layout
  • connectivity
  • impact
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