The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the residential change by zone from 1910 to 2010.
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, there are 7 different regions
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Latin
America
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, Africa, North
America
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,
Asia
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,
Europe
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, including Russia and others,and
finally
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the Middle East. As we can see ,
Asia
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in
Europe
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have the biggest populations in both years.
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, all the other areas increased slightly, but age and
Europe
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decreased in 2010.
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, in 1910,
Asia
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and
Europe
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were the biggest regions in
population
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in addition
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, more than half of the citizens were in
Asia
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, and about 25% of the individuals were in
Europe
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.In third place, North
America
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with 5%. Africa , with 4% and Latin
America
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, including other regions, have the same amount of
population
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, with a percentage of 3%.
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, in 2010 the world
population
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increased significantly from 1700 million
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1910 to 6 billion. 54% of the citizens were in
Asia
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. In the second place came
Europe
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with residents of 14%. 10% of the
population
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in Africa. And 8% in Latin
America
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.
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, North
America
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and the Middle East were really close and resident rate with 5% and 6% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words america, asia, europe, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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