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The charts below show the proportion of holidaymakers using four different types of accommodation in three different years.

The charts below show the proportion of holidaymakers using four different types of accommodation in three different years.
The provided pie charts illustrate the proportion of holidaymakers using four different types of accommodation
in
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three
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apply
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from 1988 to 2008.
Overall
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,
charts
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the charts
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 measured percentage. From
quick
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a quick
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looking
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. In 1998 and
2008
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2008,
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people
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 spent them the holidays
on
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 hotels 22%.
Then
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 retained
apartments
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around 25%.
Firstly
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 , in 1988
people
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visit
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 different places to have
them
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their
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vaction
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vacation
 there. Around 52%
from
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 humans stay with family and friends . The least way to spend them holidays was
rentend
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renting
 apartments
it
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 7% of
people
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 visit
it
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them
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.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 in
1998
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1998,
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 the most
type
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common type
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 of accommodation was staying with
a
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apply
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friends and
family
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family,
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 around 60%. The least place they spent time there
as
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a
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 rented apartment
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, it's
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it's
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it is
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 around 15%. At the same time, in
2008
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2008,
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people
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prefer
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preferred
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 three types first
staying
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being staying
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 with family and
friends
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friends,
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it
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at
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 44%. Second they they always love
rented
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a rented
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apartment
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apartment,
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 it's 22%.
At the
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end
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this
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 is the percentage of four different types of accommodation in three different years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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