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Band 2

Fresh water is a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, increasing demand has made it a global problem. What are the causes of this growing demand? What can governments and individuals do to respond to the problem?

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Introduction
Healthy
water
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 is very limited in some nations like
suadn
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Sudan
,
Affrica
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Africa
, and other
countres
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countries
.
Acourding
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According
 to HWO (Health
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water
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Water
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orgnaization
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Organisation
)
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),
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it became a common issue
in
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on
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 our planet.
Body paragraph 1
Moreover
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, many people argue that the
caus
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cause
 of
this
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 major
proplem
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problem
 is the huge growth in the oil and gas
industri
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industry
.
In
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addition
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addition,
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alot
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a lot
 of the top
company
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companies
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such
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 as
,
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apply
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Aramco,
sabik
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Sabik
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, plus other
enamoras
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enormous
copmanys
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companies
 in the
filed
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field
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has
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have
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 a big
inpact
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impact
 in
this
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 subject.
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furthermore
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Furthermore
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,
The
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the
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incerase
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increase
 of H2S and other
petrochimicales
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petrochemicals
 has
also
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effected
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affected
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 the
water
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 health.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,
Acourding
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According
 to many
reasurch
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researchers
individuals
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, individuals
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desbite
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despite
 being minor to
this
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 matter, but they can
collabrate
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collaborate
 together to solve
this
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proplem
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problem
 in many ways
like
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, like
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 stop wasting good
water
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, only use it in
showring
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showering
 and drinking.
Also
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, teaching
thier
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their
 kids the
importnce
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importance
 of good
water
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.
Conclusion
In my opinion, Healthy
water
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 issue is a major
proplem
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problem
 and must be
solve
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solved
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. Both governments,
Companys
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companies
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 and
Indivisuals
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individuals
 need to work together to find
solution
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a solution
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 because
damged
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damaged
water
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 can impact badly
to
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on
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 our health and
to
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apply
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the Environment.

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task
Plan your answer in 3 parts: small intro, 2 or 3 main ideas with a light link, short end. Put causes first and then what to do.
coherence
Make ideas flow by using links like 'also', 'and', 'but' in a simple way. Put each idea in a line.
grammar
Use clear spell and grammar. Check words like 'water' and 'problem' so readers can read easy.
content
The essay shows a view that water issue is big and needs fix.
content
The writer tries to give ideas for cause and fix.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Industrialization
  • Agricultural irrigation
  • Urbanization
  • Climate change
  • Drought
  • Water pollution
  • Water-saving technologies
  • Water-intensive diets
  • Regulations
  • Water conservation
  • Awareness campaigns
  • Subsidies
  • Incentives
  • Desalination
  • Rainwater harvesting
  • Transboundary water resources
  • Sustainable
  • Efficient appliances
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