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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Book
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A book
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 based on
offence
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an offence
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 or
similar
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a similar
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TV
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 program has recently gained momentum across the globe in many states. It started as an escape from boredom by infusing thrill with suspense
while
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 watching or reading. I believe it has both advantages and disadvantages
on
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for
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 everyone
especially
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, especially
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 children. The major reason for it being famous is
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the suspenseful
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 nature in which they are crafted.
People
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 switch from comedy to thriller-
crime
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 drama
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mainly because it gives some sense of excitement and anticipation
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 watching, and makes everyone
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crave
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 more. The other reason is being fear of missing out.
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 Netflix
when
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, when
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 releasing a
crime
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 thriller
show
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,
they
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apply
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release
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releases
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 all episodes at once. To stay relevant
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People
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, People
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 watch it in one sitting
so
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, so
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to
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as to
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 have some sort of conversation with
other
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others
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 before it gets spoiled. Inspiration to solve some kind of case is
also
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 considered one reason for
popularity
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the popularity
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 of
these
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this
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 genre. In my opinion,
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theme
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a theme
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 has both pros and cons before having
final
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the final
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 say. Watching or reading some kind of
crime
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 story can lead children to act violently or think of it as cool
behavior
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behaviour
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 to mimic. In, Times of India article,
Watching
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watching
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 long
running
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long-running
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show
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 like CID has
influence
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influenced
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 so many
criminal
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criminals
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 who try to mimic similar
violation
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violations
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.
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,
TV
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show
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shows
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 or novels
also
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 inspire
people
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 to join
crime
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investigation
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investigator
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 role, or
police
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the police
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.
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,
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TV
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a TV
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show
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 like Brooklyn
nine nine
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Nine-Nine
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 can create an interest among teenagers to join
police
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the police
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 force. In conclusion,
All
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all
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 around the world, reading
crime
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 narratives or watching similar
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tv
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TV
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 serials has gained significant popularity among
people
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 from all age groups. Which should be relished with caution and
sense
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a sense
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 of socialness on what to get inspired with. As I
mentioned
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mentioned,
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 it can have both positive and negative consequences.

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task response
Plan your answer. Start with a clear view on why crime books and TV show are popular, then give your own view. End with a short final line.
coherence
Make the plan clear. Use three parts: intro, body, and conclusion. Each body part has one idea with an example.
coherence
Use joining words to show order and link ideas. For example: first, also, but, for example.
grammar
Check grammar. Fix mistakes like 'In, Times' and 'Such theme'. Use capital letters for names.
content
The essay gives some reasons people like crime books and shows.
content
It uses examples from real shows (Netflix, CID, Brooklyn Nine Nine).
structure
There is a clear attempt to give the overall idea and a view.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • intrigue
  • enigma
  • compelling
  • addictive
  • chilling
  • forensics
  • procedural
  • thriller
  • suspense
  • psychological
  • criminalistics
  • deviant
  • intricate
  • red herrings
  • misdirection
  • sardonically
  • socioeconomic
  • catharsis
  • moral ambiguity
  • multidimensional
  • protagonist
  • antagonist
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