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Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, many
people
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 think a newly built
house
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 has to follow the
style
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 of old
houses
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 in local areas.
However
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, others think that
people
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 should have
freedom
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the freedom
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 to build
houses
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of
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in
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 their own
style
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. In my opinion, I partly agree with the ideas. Discussed below are several reasons in
favor
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favour
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 of my perspectives. First and foremost,
people
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 have the idea to follow the
style
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 of old
houses
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 because they want to keep the traditional values of local areas.
This
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 means that they will have a group of
the
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houses
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 which are the same material,
color
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colour
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, and
square
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size
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. To illustrate, I would like to mention that the
China Town
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Chinatown
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 in my city, where you can see the
house
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, has the same structure and you easily recognise the specifications of the town.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 think that they should build a
house
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 following their
style
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. Because of the fact that the
house
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 is a place that brings
the
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apply
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comfort and happiness, it should be like what they want. In my opinion, I agree with keeping the traditional values by following the old
style
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 and
also
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 need to build a
house
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like
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in
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 your
style
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. In conclusion, the above-mentioned facts have created a dilemma.
While
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 many
people
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 want to follow the old
style
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 when building a
house
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, others like to do
their
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it their
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style
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way
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and
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, and
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 it is still a controversial issue. As far as I am concerned, it
brings
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has
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 both good and bad sides.
People
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 could
also
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 have
further
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 consideration on
this
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 issue.

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development
Add clear reasons for each point and back them with simple facts or events.
organization
Make one main idea in each paragraph and keep a simple flow from start to end.
coherence
Use small linking words to connect ideas, like also, but, for example.
structure
Begin with a clear view in the first or second paragraph and end with a short restatement.
language
Check grammar and fix mistakes that make the meaning unclear.
content
The writer covers both sides and gives a view.
structure
There is a clear attempt to give examples.
content
The end shows the writer’s own view.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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