Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that
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need some discipline to gain various skills in their lives.
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there is a commonly held belief that all
children
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should take on many responsibilities, there is an argument that opposes it.
This
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essay will discuss both points of view, and
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, I will express my opinion. On the one hand,
children
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from families that tend to enable their kids to do some household chores show notably good behaviour compared to other kids.
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,
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helping at home have gained many skills that help them advance in life.
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, there is no doubt that teaching
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discipline and letting them hold some responsibilities that align with their abilities and their ages is one of the roles that parents should play.
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, a two-year-old could be able to take responsibility for eating with his hand without help from a parent ,
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a child three years old could be able to eat and drink by himself,
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a scientific journal.
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,
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, when they are outside of school, should be free from any duties to enjoy their lives. It is
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possible to say that parents should not carry on their
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's work.
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, babies, toddlers, and even 7-year-olds should be relying completely on their families.
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, people in their first 7 years should absorb love and just love from their mother and father. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that
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should not be taking on any duties at home except which is necessary to help progress in their lives.

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Task Response
Explain your ideas clearly with a clear plan in each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence that states the point of the paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clear links between ideas. Use proper transitions so each paragraph stands to the next.
Task Response
Give more good examples that fit the point and are easy to check. Do not use facts that are hard to prove.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Check grammar and keep sentences simple. Use common words and short forms where you can.
Content
The essay tries to cover both sides and gives an opinion.
Structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
Cohesion
Some linking words are used to join ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • extra responsibilities
  • develop skills
  • life lessons
  • work ethic
  • sense of responsibility
  • contribute to
  • family
  • community
  • playtime
  • physical development
  • mental development
  • balance
  • enjoyment
  • guide
  • childhood
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