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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. To what extent do you agree?

Its true that some people had adopted
this
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 case in the past decades that rich
countries
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 should
support
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 poor
countries
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 in terms of aid for health care and education, The first obvios thought on
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 manner
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 indeed they should
support
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 them, But when you get deep in the details and see some of the problems you will get a second opnion on that. I agree, I think it's a part of the rich
countries
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 responseability that they
support
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 poor
countries
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 for a couple of reasons,
Firstly
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 it's humanly duty and a good deed to help them because you will never grauntee what will happen to you in the future and you might be in their feet one day,
Secondly
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 you might prevent a world wide crisis
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 some poor
countries
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 status, For instacne some
countries
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 are responsible of some of the food subbly chain or some of the materials to factories. But
on the other hand
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, Thier might be some consequences on that decision,
Such
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 as corruption and
this
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 is common issue in the poor contries, And
as a result
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 of that the problem is going to be worse than before and the country would be chaos, And another huge problem some of the rich
countries
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 would use the
support
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 in an unethical manner, like exploitation of the country's status and use it to take control over the country and they will take what they want from them unjustly. In
conclusion
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 I think that rich
counties
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countries
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 should help poor
countries
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but
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 with
survalance
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surveillance
 and good manners in a secure way that ensures the
support
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realy
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really
reach
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reaches
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for
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apply
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the people who
realy
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really
needs
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need
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 it.

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task response
Make your view clear at the start and restate it in the end. Plan 3 strong reasons and explain each.
coherence
Put each idea in its own paragraph with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to show how ideas are linked.
grammar vocabulary
Use fewer long sentences, fix spellings, and be consistent with grammar. Use simple, common words.
content
You touch on an important topic and give a wide view of the issue.
content
You show a view, not just one side, which helps the answer.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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