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Writing Samples
Band 4

Write a letter to reduce your number of workig hours due to part time studies.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to request you to decrease my number of working hours at your
organization
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, as
i
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I
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 am planning to extend my level of education and get a better position at your site, which
helps
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 me to improve my financial condition as well. I have looked at an institute which offers me a good opportunity to study in flexible hours
but
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 the problem arose is that
,
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apply
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 both the available batches
is
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 in the evening during my closing hours of work.
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, in order to manage my part-time
studies
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studies,
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i
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I
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 urge you to provide me morning shifts
specifically
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 from 7am- 3pm
so
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, so
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i
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I
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 can relax
myself
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after reaching home and start studying with a fresh mind.
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,
this
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 course named "Brain story"
i
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I
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 have taken to develop my skills and my understanding towards children's
behavior
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behaviour
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 as a child educator.
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, it provides me a chance to level up my position and plan new strategies for children's betterment. It could be a great opportunity for you to
as
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 a
team
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team,
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i
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I
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 could lead our team meetings sometimes on
this
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 regarding and can make other colleagues aware of these steps too. Thank you for understanding my situation, I request you to change my schedule from next week and update as soon as possible
as
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 other staff
ay
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may
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gets
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get
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 a heads-up.
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,
i
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I
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 have talked to one of my
colleague
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colleagues
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 who is willing to exchange
with
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shifts with
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 my shift.
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, you can pass a notice whenever you get time. Yours sincerely, Malise

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task response
Be clear about the main ask in the first line and keep it simple.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph and start a new paragraph when you move to a new point.
language
Check grammar and spell capital I and name a few words correctly.
tone
Keep a formal and polite tone all through the letter.
tone
Polite tone and clear wish to learn more.
content
Gives reasons and shows plan to change shift.
structure
Ends with proper closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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