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Band 3

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your fiend this summer

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my desire to thank you for your
advice
Punctuation problem
advice,
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that
Correct word choice
which
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 I have taken
a
Change preposition
from a
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guidebook. I would like to tell you about myself
traveling
Use the right word
travelling
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. I was in Zakopane both with my son
around
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for around
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 one week. I have planned
before
Change preposition
for
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 6
month
Fix the agreement mistake
months
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.We went skiing.
Was
Correct pronoun usage
It was
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 good that I took a guidebook because we could
to
Verb problem
apply
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find all traces and
cheked
Correct your spelling
checked
were
Use the right word
where
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 all
restaraunts
Correct your spelling
restaurants
, cafes and more
othres
Correct your spelling
others
.
Verb problem
were.
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structure
Make a clear plan for the letter. A short start, then one idea in each part, and a kind close.
grammar
Fix word form and grammar. Use simple past for past events and simple present for facts.
organization
Use one idea in each paragraph. Put the travel talk in one part and say thanks in another.
greeting closing
Finish with a polite close such as ’Yours sincerely’ and your name.
spelling
Check spell of town and common words like guidebook, skiing, restaurant.
purpose
The letter has a clear aim to say thanks.
tone
Polite tone is good in parts.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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