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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The bar chart shows the frequency of Americans eating at
fast -
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fast-food
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food
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 restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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, there were fluctuations in different dining frequencies over the decade. In 2003, about 30% of people ate at fast
food
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 restaurants once a
week
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, 30% did so once or twice a month,
and
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17% ate several
times
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 a
week
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, 5% never ate
the
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fast
food
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and
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, and
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 only less than 5% ate daily. By 2006, the proportion of weekly diners rose to nearly 35%,
while
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 the monthly group decreased slightly. The several
times
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 a
week
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 group increased to 20%. In 2013, the number of people who ate fast
food
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 daily, those who did so a few
times
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 a year, and those who never ate it remained unchanged.The number of people in the once or twice a month group increased,
while
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 the numbers of those who ate several
times
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 a
week
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 and once a
week
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 both decreased.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, week, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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