The line graph shows the number of people who used different communication services in the world

The line graph shows the number of people who used different communication services in the world
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows the number of people who used different communication services in the world
The line graph compares the number of individuals using different communication services from 1998 to 2008 in the world.
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, it can be clearly seen that cellular phone service increased rapidly
while
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other services remained almost unchanged. In 1998, mobile broadband services stayed unchanged for 6 years (0%), and in 2006, there was a steep growth to about 4 , and
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figure increased to just under 10% in 2008. In terms of internet service
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was 4% in 1998, and rose steadily to 5% in 2000. The index of internet
usage
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experienced a slight rise to 9% in 2002,
while
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in 2004
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figure rose to 10%. In 2008, the
usage
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of the internet increased rapidly to 20%. Cellular phone service was at 5% in 1998, and
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trend steeply
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increased
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to 20% in 2002.
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, in
2006
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2006,
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this
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figure experienced a significant increase to 40%, and by the end of the year (2008) , the
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of cellular phones rose significantly to 60%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words usage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "steep" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication services
  • overall trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • traditional vs. modern
  • technological advancements
  • regional disparities
  • adoption and usage
  • future predictions
  • sociopolitical events
  • altering usage patterns
  • detailed analysis
  • popularity
  • emphasize
  • demonstrate
  • surpass
  • overshadow
  • implications
  • innovation
  • transition
  • dominance
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