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the pie chart show the sizes of classes ion primary schools in four states in Australia in 2010 summerize the information below

the pie chart show the sizes of classes ion primary schools in four states in Australia in 2010 summerize the information below
The pie chart below
show
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shows
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 the
distrubtion
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distribution
 of class sizes in primary schools across four states of
Australia
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 in 2010.
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, smaller
classes
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 of 25 students
of
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or
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 fewer were most common in every
satete
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state
. The
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Australian
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Australia
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 Capital Territory recorded the highest
persentage
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percentage
 of very small
classes
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,
while
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 South
Australia
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 had the largest share og
mid sized
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mid-sized
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classes
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. In New South Wales, about 63% of
classes
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 contained 25 or fewer students, with 33% in the 26
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 30 range and only 4% above 30. South
Australia
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 showed a similar pattern, though 36% of
classes
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 had 20 or fewer pupils.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, classes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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