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The tables below show response to a questionnaire given by two groups of people who showed their opinions about a new theatre.

The tables below show response to a questionnaire given by two groups of people who showed their opinions about a new theatre.
The tables compare the results of the feedback taken
though
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 club members and
general
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 public
according to
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 three main features of the theatre.
Overall
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, entire two groups of people responded positively to
both quality
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all three qualities
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, information and facilities,
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 club members provided
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slight
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 higher percentages than
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the general
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 public.
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with
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 production quality
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it
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was welcomed quite
similarly
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 between members and local people, with 70% and 67%, respectively. In
this
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 category, satisfactory level was
also
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 a little higher than unsatisfactory responses, and there was a mere 13%-18%. Regarding the results about informative sides of plays
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 performances,
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 public accounted for the highest percentages of excellence compared to the participants of the club.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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