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The charts below show the class size of four states of Australia. in 2010

The charts below show the class size of four states of Australia. in 2010
The given pie charts compare the distribution of class size in four states of
Australia
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, namely New South Wales, South
Australia
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, the Australian Capital Territory and Western
Australia
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 in 2010. In general, 20 undergraduates or fewer were popular in two locations
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furthermore
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, in New South Wales was mainly between the 21-25 age group,
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and 26
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 and 30 was the dominant trend in South
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. Starting with the Australian Capital Territory, the dominant class size was 21–25 postgraduates, representing 51%,
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 the data
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classes
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 with more than 30
students
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 were the least , at only 2%.
Classes
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 of 26–30
students
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 accounted for 27%,
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 those with 20 or fewer
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 made up 20%. Turning to Western
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, 43% of
classes
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 contained 21–25
students
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, followed by 29% with 26–30
students
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. Smaller
classes
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 (20 or fewer) comprised 25%,
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 the figure for more than 30 sophomores stood at just 3%. In New South Wales, the largest proportion of
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 had 21–25 undergraduates, making up 40% of the total.
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 was closely followed by scholars of 26–30 scholars at 27%. A
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 30% of
classes
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 contained 20 or fewer postgraduates,
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 only 3% had more than 30 postgraduates.
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, in South
Australia
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, the majority of
classes
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 (44%) consisted of 26–30 sophomores, slightly higher than the 30% recorded for the 21–25 range. Small
classes
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 of 20 or fewer accounted for 23%,
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 larger ones with more than 30 scholars represented just 3%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, classes, students with synonyms.
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