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Band 5.5

The graph bellow shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 1999 to 2020

The graph bellow shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 1999 to 2020
The line graph provides information about how much oil was consumed by four regions between 1999 and 2020.
Overall
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,
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the figure
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figure
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figures
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 for China and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
icrease
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increase
 over the years,
while
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 the USA,
western
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Western
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 Europe and Japan experienced
decrease
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a decrease
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. As the graph shows,
started
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starting
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 at 2 in 1999, China's figure went up slightly to 4 in 2015. Trend ended with
little
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a little
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 decline to just over 3 in 2020. Oil consumption in
Middle
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the Middle
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 East was 2 in 1999, it
show
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showed
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gradual
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a gradual
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 growth
aproximently
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approximately
 to 3 in 2020.
By contrast
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, usage of oil in
the
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apply
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western
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Western
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 Europe and Japan was at 4 in 1999, figure
decrease
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decreased
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 slightly to 2 in 2020. There
was
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were
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 about 9 in 1999 for
USA
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the USA
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and
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, and
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 it vitnised small grew
to
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slightly to
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 10 in 2005, after that it
plugged
Verb problem
dropped
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 down to 8 in 2025.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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