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The graph below shows the number of international students enrolled in universities in Australia, Canada, and the UK between 2000 and 2020.

The graph below shows the number of international students enrolled in universities in Australia, Canada, and the UK between 2000 and 2020.
The line chart shows the number of enrollments in universities in Australia, Canada, and the UK from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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, the line graph shows the number of enrollments in
academy
Correct article usage
the academy
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 in three different countries. The total of three countries increased
for
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over
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 20 years, and has not decreased. As the line graph shows, the volume of enrollment in universities in Australia started at 50000 in 2000, in 2010
this
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 figure rose to 100000, and reached a peak of 200000 in 2020. The volume of students enrolled in
academy
Correct article usage
the academy
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 in the United Kingdom began at about 57500 in 2000, in 2010
this
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 figure climbed slightly to 74000, and
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 total finished at about 90000 in 2020.
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, the number of students enrolled in college in Canada is the lowest, but
this
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 amount rose to 50000 students in 2010 , and in 2020 the amount ended at 124000 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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