The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in a foreign language in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in a foreign language in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in a foreign language in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graphs below show data about the proportion of pupils who are fluent in a second language in various countries.
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,
females
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are higher than
males
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in all 6 countries, with Thailand as an exception. The other significant feature of
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graph is that India has the highest percentage of both female and male students,
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China stands
last
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in boys' percentage. In detail, in
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more than two-thirds of their female learners know how to speak another language, at about 67%,
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Romania comes in second place with approx. 65%. For
males
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, the percentage of those who can speak another language is 55% in India and just above 40% in Romania. In Vietnam, there is a significant gap between the two genders, with 55% of girls proficient in foreign languages and just about 37% of boys.
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, China reports the weakest performance, at about 30% for
females
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and only 17% for
males
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. Russia sits in the mid-range (around 43% for
females
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and 35% for
males
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). Thailand is
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notable outlier
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male proficiency stands near 31%, marginally above
females
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at roughly 26%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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