A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary or unpaid work. you would like to do some voluntary or unpaid work at the Museum . write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary unpaid work. in your letter explain why you want to do voluntary work and the museum describe some skills and equality you have that would be useful . give details of when you would be available for work .

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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letter to join voluntary work at the Museum. My name is Amarpreet Singh, and I live in Pickering,
Onatrio
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Ontario
.
Firstly
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, I have recently completed my diploma in Supply Chain Management. Currently, I am free as my next studies
going
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are going
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to start after three months.
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, I am looking to both pass my time doing something meaningful and contribute to society.
Secondly
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, I am 24 years
old
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24-year-old
boy
,
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apply
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who
had
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has
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experiences
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experience
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in various jobs ,
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as accounting, cleaning,and can work as a receptionist too.
Apart from
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this
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, I
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have a security license under which I hold three years of full-time job experience. If you need assistance with guarding the building, especially at
night
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night,
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I would
happy
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be happy
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to do so.
Thirdly
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, I have recently
join
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a soccer club where I play as a goalkeeper on weekends. Apart from that, I am
availiable
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available
from
tommorrow
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tomorrow
for
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to
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Monday to Friday.
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, the
Museums
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museum
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is just 20 minutes away from my home
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, at
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walking distance
so
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, so
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I can
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do early morning shifts. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours
Sincerely
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, Amarpreet Singh.

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structure
Make a clear plan. Start with why you want to help, then describe what you can do and when you are free.
grammar
Check spelling and form. Fix 'Ontario','tomorrow','walking' and other small errors.
coherence
Use new paragraph for new idea. Try to keep one idea per paragraph.
tone
Keep a calm, formal tone throughout the letter.
tone
Polite greeting and closing.
content
Shows you wish to help and what you can do.
planning
Mentions distance to the museum which helps plan.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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