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Band 2

Many people believe that healthy eating and the importance of healthy food should be taught in schools. Others say that parents should teach their children about healthy food and diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant examples.

Many people believe that healthy eating and the importance of healthy
food
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 should be taught in schools. Others say that parents should teach their children about healthy
food
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 and diet. I think both
isssue
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issues
is
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are
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 important to talk
,
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about, bacause
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bacause
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because
 every
schools
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school
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 must
taught
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teach
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this
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 topic or issue to their students, and parent must teach their
child
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children
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 to diet and eat healthy
food
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. Every student or child must
now
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know
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 what and why they must eat healthy
food
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.
Why we
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We
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 must talk about
this
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 issue
,
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apply
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 because
this
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 issue is important for people to know. Because many
childern
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children
 or people have a problem with
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle and healthy
food
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 to eat. Healthy
food
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 is important for us if we want
have
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to have
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 a healthy life. If we always eat junk
food
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 or
food
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 like
that
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that,
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you
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we
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 can have a bad lifestyle and
bad
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a bad
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 body
to look
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apply
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.
Although
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 junk
food
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is have
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has
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 better taste than healthy
food
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,
but
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apply
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heathy
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healthy
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food
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give
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gives
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 us more
nutritions
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nutrition
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, or
anythink
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anything
 that
important
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is important
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 for our body

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structure
Plan your answer before you write. Say your view in a short line in the first paragraph. Then write one view, then the other, and finish with your own view in a final short paragraph.
content
Keep your ideas clear. Do not put many ideas in one line. Use short sentences.
examples
Give one or two examples from school or home to explain your point.
language
Check common words. Spelling mistakes make the meaning hard to see.
content
The topic is set and you show you know the task.
structure
You try to discuss both sides of the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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