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Many people find it difficult to give a speech or presentation in public. Some people suggest that schools should teach children to speak in public. How is it important to speak in public? Do you agree or disagree that school should teach at school?

Speaking in public might be a problem for many people.
This
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 topic might be a nightmare, usually for people
that
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who
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 do not don't know how to speak in front of
audience
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an audience
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. I personally agree that
school
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 should teach speaking in public for students. Speaking in public
need
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needs
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confidence
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 .
Confidence
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 might be gained from
early
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an early
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age
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age,
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 some people think that
confidence
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 can develop in
school
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.
School
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 can be a great opportunity for students to speak to audiences
and
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, and
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 that might develop their speaking skills and
confidence
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. In conclusion, I think it might be
advantage
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an advantage
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 for students to gain
confident
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confidence
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 and speaking skills in
school
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.

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Task Response
Add a short intro that says what you will talk about and what you think, then a clear ending that restates your view.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main idea and use easy linking words to show the order (first, then, next, finally).
Task Response
Give a reason or two for why schools can help, and give small examples of how teachers can teach public speaking.
Language
Fix small grammar errors and use the right word in some places (for example, 'an advantage' not 'a advantage', and 'confidence' not 'confident')
Idea
The writer shows a clear view that schools should teach public speaking.
Style
Sentences are short and easy to read, which helps the reader.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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