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Some people believe that lowering the speed limit is the best way to improve road safety. Others think that there are other ways to make roads safer. Discuss these two options and give your opinion.

It is often believed that decreasing speed limit is the best
way
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 to improve
safety
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 on
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roads
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roads,
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whiles
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while
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 others think that there are different ways to make
roads
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more
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apply
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safer.
This
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 essay will elaborate on both options
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, and
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 the writer will give an opinion in
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the subsequent
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 paragraph On the one
hand
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,
low
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a low
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 speed limit helps with
road
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safety
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 by creating awareness
to
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among
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 drivers.In many countries
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such
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, such
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 as England,drivers are expected to
drive
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 within a specific speed limit.These speed limits vary depending on the type of
road
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 and the environment as well.A clear example is in towns,
speed
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where speed
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 limits are normally 20mph
which
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, which
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 is normally fixed.As a
results
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result
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,the
safety
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 level is always high since drivers would not be speeding to cause any fatal
accidents
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.
On the other
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hand
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,banning
of
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apply
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the
use
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 of
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hand held
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handheld
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devices
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 is another
way
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 to reduce
road
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accidents
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.In recent times,the
use
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 of technological
devices
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while
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 driving has become rampant
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, specifically
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 the
use
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 of mobile
phone
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phones
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.Mobile
devices
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which
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, which
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 are key distractions on
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roads
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roads,
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 when banned,
it
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apply
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 will help in the improvement of
road
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safety
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.
A research
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 conducted
in
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at
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 the University of Cape Coast by Communication students revealed that banning
of the
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the use of
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use
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devices
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while
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 driving has caused a rapid decrease in
accidents
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.
This
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 is a clear reason why preventing the
use
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 of
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hand held
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handheld
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devices
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 can help improve
safety
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 on
roads
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Additional
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,banning
of
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apply
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the
use
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 of
international
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an international
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 driving
license
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 is another
way
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 that helps
road
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safety
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.
Majority
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The majority
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 of people who migrate from undeveloped countries
such
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 as Africa and Arab countries abroad to search for greener pastures normally
drive
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 with their international
license
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which
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, which
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 is not
safe
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safe,
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 as they might not be used to the rules and regulations.
For
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example
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example,
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 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom,domiciliary carers
drive
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 to
resident
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residents
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 homes to provide care for them.Most of them are not used to the
roads
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but
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, but
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 are allowed to
drive
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 with their international
license
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which
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, which
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 results in
accidents
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 In conclusion,even though
minimizing
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minimising
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 speed limits helps with
road
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safety
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 but banning the
use
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 of international
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license
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licenses
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 and
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use
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the use
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 of
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hand held
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handheld
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devices
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are
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is
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 the best
way
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 to help improve
road
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safety
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language
Use short and clear sentences. Fix many grammar and spelling errors.
structure
State your view in the intro and again in the end. Make a clear plan.
content
Keep ideas on topic. Some points like international licenses may not fit.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are connected, and make a smooth flow.
content
There is an attempt to discuss both sides.
structure
There is a basic intro and conclusion.
content
Some examples are given to support points.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lowering the speed limit
  • improve road safety
  • reduce the number of accidents
  • strict enforcement
  • deter drivers
  • road engineering
  • road design
  • driver education
  • awareness programs
  • advanced technology
  • infrastructure
  • enhance road safety
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