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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
These two maps illustrate how people can have
an
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access to a
city
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 hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the scheme depicts significant changes. Some facilities were relocated to a new place.
For example
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, there were six bus
stop
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stops
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 on both
left
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the left
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 and right
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side
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sides
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 of the hospital
road
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 in 2007.
Then
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, they are removed, and a new bus station was constructed
in
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on
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 the east
side
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 of the hospital
road
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.
Similarly
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, there was
a
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apply
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parking for both staff and
public
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the public
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in
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on
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 the east
side
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 of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 in 2007, which remained for staff cars. After that, the new car park was built
in
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on
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 the east
side
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 of
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city
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the city
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 hospital in 2010, which
was
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apply
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belonged to
public
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the public
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.
In contrast
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, new roads were added to the plan.
Although
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,
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apply
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 there were simple ways to have
an
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access to the
city
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 hospital from
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city
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the city
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road
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, hospital
road
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 and ring
road
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 in 2007, two new roundabouts were created
in
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north and south of the hospital
road
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 in 2010.
Furthermore
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, these
square
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squares
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provided
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provide
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 different ways to
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city
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the city
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road
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,
bus
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the bus
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 station and
ring
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the ring
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road
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.
Apart from
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this
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, the ring
road
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 remained unchanged. All in all,
it is clear that
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 the environment of the
city
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 hospital
had
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has
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 changed a lot in 3 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, side, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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