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I recent years owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? What do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In recent years, it has become far more normal for in some countries,
possessing
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owning
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 a home rather than leasing is very significant for
population
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the population
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.
This
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 essay will explore both perspectives with clear examples. On the one hand, one key reason for prioritising purchasing a house is considered more important
than
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that
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 renting because it provides stability to people.
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 to say, if individuals own their houses, they do not need to worry about rising rental costs
and
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, and
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 they can feel more independent and secure.
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, Japan and South Korea
save
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have saved
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 a lot of money for many years because
this
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 way helps to protect future generations.
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, being a homeowner can lead to financial security and social status. If it were not for holding property,
it
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there
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 would
tenancy
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be tenancy
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 problems and disrupt durability. Given that when we become homeowners, we are free from extra debts, pressure
and
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, and
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 we gain an enormous achievement.
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, the main reason why having property
provide
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provides
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 personal freedom and self-reliance. Namely, inhabitants who live on a lease must obey restrictions
such
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 as keeping domestic animals, painting walls, or renovating.
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, after Americans buy a new house, they create
comfortable
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a comfortable
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 and creative atmosphere
throughout decorate
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by decorating
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according to
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one’s
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their
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 taste.
As a result
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, possessing a home
develop
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develops
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citizen’s
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a citizen’s
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 artistic
skill
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skills
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 and
hone
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hones
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 the family’s lifestyle.
To sum up
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,
while
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 it is true that being
a
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an
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 owner supplies steadiness, it is
also
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 clear that it can give autonomy and innovative ability.
Thus
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, a balanced approach is more reasonable, not only does it give safety, but it
also
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ensure
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ensures
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 economic stability.

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structure
Plan your answer first. In the intro, say your view. In the body, give two clear reasons. End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
content
Make each paragraph focus on one idea. Start with a short topic sentence, then add one or two reasons or an example, and end with a line that links back to your idea.
grammar
Use simple, clear grammar. Avoid long, mixed sentences. Fix words that sound wrong for the idea, like 'tenancy problems' or 'durability'.
cohesion
Use small linking words to help the flow: first, also, but, so, in conclusion.
idea
The essay shows both sides of the topic.
example
Some parts use examples to back up the point.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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