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Band 4

Working from home has become common. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the trend?

It is widely
acknowledge
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acknowledged
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 that people nowadays prefer working from
home
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 through the Internet
which
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, which
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 plays an increasingly important role in today’s war
like
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, like
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 many modern
development
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developments
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. It brings both positive and negative
aspect
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aspects
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.
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However
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However,
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 I’m firmly convinced that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages .
one
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One
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 clear advantage of individuals working from their household is that it
provide
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provides
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 flexibility and convenience . Put simply,
this
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 means workers can simply focus on
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their
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personal life and job
required
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requirements
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 in a
balanced
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balanced,
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 flexible way . For example,
stay
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apply
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at
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a
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home
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stay-at-home
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 parent can manage her household chores plus keeping up with work duties at the same time.
This
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show
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shows
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 that working from
home
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 offers flexibility and comfort for employee to manage their lives
responsibility
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responsibly
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Punctuation problem
, hassle
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hassle free
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hassle-free
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.
Nevertheless
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, a potential drawback of
employee
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employees
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 working from their household is that it creates a significant limitation in social and communication skills in
workers
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workers'
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 personality.
In other words
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 employee would face
huge
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a huge
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 struggle when communicating with other people
outdoor
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outdoors
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. As they would be shy, reluctant and uncomfortable talking to others .
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, individual
spent
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spend
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 over eight hours a day behind screens
limiting
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, limiting
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 their opportunities of creating
real life
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real-life
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relationships with others. In
summary
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summary,
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 the topic of the increasing demand of people wanting to work at
home
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 undoubtedly brings both benefits and challenges. On balance,
however
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, the advantages are far more significant, and I believe they outweigh the disadvantages. In summary, [topic] undoubtedly brings both benefits and challenges. On balance,
however
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, 4the advantages are far more significant, and I believe they outweigh the disadvantages.

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grammar
Check grammar and spelling so the writing is clear and easy to read.
coherence
Make the ideas flow better. Use linking words to join points smoothly.
content
Give more clear details to back each point, with simple examples.
vocabulary
Use shorter and simpler sentences. This helps the band score for vocabulary.
content
The writer states a clear view from the start.
content
There is a concrete example about a stay-at-home parent.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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