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The provided pie charts show statistics of granted degrees at the National University from 1990 to 2010.

The provided pie charts show statistics of granted degrees at the National University from 1990 to 2010.
The pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 statistics of granted
degrees
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 at the National University between 1990 and 2010.
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overall
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Overall
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, we can see
in
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that in
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 2000 and
2010
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2010,
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 the
computer
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science
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around
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was around
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 40% and 50%.
In addition
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,the percentage of granted
degrees
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 in 1990 for subjects starting with medicine
around
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was around
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 25%.
while
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 law
15
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is 15
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%.
the
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The
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 most common
degrees
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is
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are
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computer
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science
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 and business. The
computer
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science
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around
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is around
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 30%
whereas
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 the business is the same percentage 30%.
However
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,in
2000
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2000,
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 the most recent data
is
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in
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computer
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science
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 it's around 40%.
moreover
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,
medicine
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in medicine
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it
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, it
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 is 30 %.
In
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On
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 the other hand
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,
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in 2010
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,
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the most percent of degree
is
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was
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computer
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science
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science,
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 it was 45% the least
commons
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common
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is
Wrong verb form
was
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 law and business they was the same percentage 15%. In conclusion, we select the most common
percent
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percentage
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 for all statistics of granted
degrees
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 at the National University from 1990 to 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words degrees, computer, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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