The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000.

The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries in the period 1980-2000.
The
bart
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bar
chart compares how much
energy
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was generated by wind in four
countries
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between 1980 and 2000.
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, the
megawatts
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of
produced
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energy produced
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energy
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by wind increased generally among all
countries
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.
Energy
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production in India was generally lower compared to other
countries
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,
while
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the United States generated the most of amount of
energy
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. As the graph shows, the amount
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generated
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energy generated
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energy
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in India started at 200
megawatts
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in 1985 and reached
to
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1200
megawatts
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throughout
period
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the period
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by growing moderately.
As a result
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, the amount of produced
energy
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in Germany witnessed the lowest results in 2000,
while
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it was a bit higher between 1985 and 1990 and equal
with
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800
megawatss
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megawatts
, compared to India.
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, Denmark started production of
energy
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with 200
megawatts
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in 1995 and experienced a rapid growth to around 1600
megawatts
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, which was the most
energy
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produced
country
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in 2000. Coming into,
energy
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production in the United States
,
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it
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showed the highest results in
range
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the range
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of between 1200
megawatts
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and 1600
megawatts
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in 1985 and in 1995.
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However
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it
exprienced
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experienced
a slight decline to 1500
megawatts
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, which caused
being
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it to be
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in
the
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the second rate among other
countries
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, countries, megawatts with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable energy
  • Turbine
  • Megawatt (MW)
  • Gigawatt (GW)
  • Sustainable
  • Energy generation
  • Growth pattern
  • Milestone
  • Significant growth spurts
  • Stagnation
  • Production capacity
  • Energy policy
  • Investment in renewable energy
  • Technological advances
  • Environmental impact
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