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The graph below shows the number of overseas who came to the uk for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas who came to the uk for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the population
amount
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apply
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of international
travallers
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travellers
 who visited the
UK
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 for different goals between 1989 to 2009.
Overall
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, the trend in all three goals to
visited
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visit
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 the
UK
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were
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increased
during
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from
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 1989 to 2009. Most
of
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people came to
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UK
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the UK
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 for holidays in 1989
and
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, and
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 it was still the main reason that visitors came to
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UK
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the UK
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 twenty years later. In detail, over 6
million
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 people came to
the
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apply
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Britain for
holiday
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a holiday
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 in 1989 and the number fluctuated between 6 to 9
million
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 and ended at nearly 8
million
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 in 2009. The
oversea
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overseas
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 business
travallers
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travellers
 of
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UK
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the UK
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was
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were
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 over 5
million
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 in 1989 and it
droped
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dropped
 and
then
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 surged to
aboout
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about
 8
million
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 during two decades, but it
falled
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fell
 to
lower
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less than
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 7
million
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 in 2009. Less than 4
million
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 tourists visited
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UK
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the UK
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 to friends or relatives in 1989
and
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, and
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 the number grew to nearly 7
million
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 and
droped
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dropped
 to approximately 6
million
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 in 2009.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "droped" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • came to the UK
  • different purposes
  • trend
  • overall insights
  • increased
  • decreased
  • fluctuated
  • time period
  • specific purposes
  • mentioned in the graph
  • e.g., business, holiday, study
  • changed over time
  • significant changes
  • notable peaks and troughs
  • possible reasons
  • conclude
  • key points
  • discussed
  • external factors
  • economic factors
  • political events
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