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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates how unemployed
women
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 and
men
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 spent their
time
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 in the UK in the
last
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 year.
Overall
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,
Housework
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, shopping and job hunting were the most common activities for
women
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 and
men
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 in the
last
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 year.
While
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 drinking and staying in bed were the least for both. Regarding the table,
women
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 spent their
time
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 on
housework
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 at 49% in the morning,
while
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men
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 spent 19% of their
time
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 on
housework
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. But in the afternoon,
women
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 spent most of their
time
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 on
housework
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 by 21%,
whereas
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men
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 spent most of their
time
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 watching TV by 14%. Drinking and staying in bed were the least common activities in the morning for both genders. In comparison with females, who drink in the morning by 1%, males have the largest percentage at 2%. Meanwhile, staying in bed was the least common activity in the afternoon for
women
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 and
men
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 at 0% and 1% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, time, housework with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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