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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transformingthe lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In recent times,new technologies and ways of purchasing and selling are transforming
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lives
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the lives
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 of consumers.The writer strongly agrees
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 for that. First of all,it is an undeniable fact that
technology
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 has widely transformed the
lives
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 of consumers when it comes to marketing.
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Easy
access
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 to products is one essential impact of
technology
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 in marketing strategies.
People
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 can easily get
access
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 to
food stuffs
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,
clothings
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clothing
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 and toiletries from online shops
such
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 as Amazon,Shein,temu,
pretty little things
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 and eBay.As a
results
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,Individuals are able to select any item of their choice with the use of mobile phones,iPads and laptops without going through the stress of walking in town to buy things needed.A survey conducted by students
in
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 the
university
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University
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 of Cape
coast
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 revealed that easy
access
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 to items has rapidly increased over the past few years with the aid of online marketing.
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 positive impact of new technologies
in
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on
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 the
lives
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 of
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people
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society
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,
people
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 are able
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to make the right choices with the help of new
technology
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 marketing strategies.Items exhibited for
sales
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sale
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 are clearly explained
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details
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detail
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 on the internet for consumers.
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,gym products which are marketed online are clearly explained on websites.A good explain is protein shakes.
People
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 are able to get all the essential information
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about
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 a product online by reading reviews and watching videos of these products to enable them
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 the right choice. In conclusion,
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people
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people's
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easily
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access
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 to things and making the right choices are the two main positive impacts of
technology
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 strategies
in
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on
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 the
lives
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society

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structure
Plan a clear intro with your view stated first. Then add three body paragraphs with a main idea in the first sentence.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Start each with a topic sentence and finish with a short link to the next idea.
grammar
Fix grammar and spelling errors, like As a result, to to, Esasy. Use simple, correct forms.
lexical
Choose simple words well. Do not repeat the same idea. Use a wider range of small phrases.
punctuation
Check your punctuation and use paragraphs to guide the reader. Try to keep sentences short and clear.
content
You show a clear view that you agree with the statement.
content
You use examples from online shopping to explain your point.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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