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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date open, km of routes, and passagers numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date open, km of routes, and passagers numbers per year in millions.
The table compares the underground railway systems in six major cities in terms of their opening date, the total length of their routes, and the annual passenger numbers.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 the London Underground is the oldest and most extensive system by route length,
while
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 the Tokyo Metro serves by far the largest number of
passengers
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 annually.
In contrast
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, the systems in Kyoto and Los Angeles are the newest and least used.
According to
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 the data, the London Underground, opened in 1863, has the longest network at 394 kilometres and serves 775
million
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passengers
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 per year. The systems in Paris and Tokyo, which opened later in 1900 and 1927, respectively, have shorter routes (199 km and 155 km) but significantly higher passenger numbers, with Tokyo's system serving a massive 1,928
million
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 people annually. The underground railways in Washington D.C. and Kyoto are of a similar scale in terms of route length, at 126 and 11 kilometres respectively.
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, Washington D.C.'s system carries a considerably higher number of
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 (144
million
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) compared to Kyoto's (45
million
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).
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, the Los Angeles metro, which opened most recently in 2001, has a 28-kilometre route and is used by 50
million
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passengers
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 each year.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city
  • year
  • open
  • opened
  • start
  • built
  • length
  • km
  • route
  • network
  • system
  • passenger
  • passengers
  • data
  • table
  • trend
  • change
  • increase
  • rise
  • growth
  • decrease
  • fall
  • long
  • short
  • old
  • new
  • big
  • small
  • more
  • less
  • many
  • few
  • the
  • and
  • but
  • or
  • however
  • therefore
  • because
  • also
  • in
  • general
  • overall
  • for
  • example
  • compare
  • contrast
  • describe
  • explain
  • lead
  • result
  • point
  • six
  • cities
  • urban
  • mass
  • people
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