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The charts below show the percentages of types of vehicles sold in the United States in the selected years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of types of vehicles sold in the United States in the selected years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts depict the proportions of cars,
trucks
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 and
SUVs
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 that were sold in the USA during 1980, 1990, 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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,
The
Fix capitalization
the
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 cars were bought
most
Correct article usage
the most
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 in every given period
,
Punctuation problem
.
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In contrast
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, The less
were
Correct word order
trucks were
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trucks
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 that people in the United States chose to buy.
While
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only
Rephrase
apply
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in 1990,
SUVs
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 were
Change preposition
at the
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the
Correct pronoun usage
their
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least
Correct word choice
lowest
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 in stead.
To begin
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 with, the cars were the most that
American's
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American
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 citizens significantly selected in the given period
with
Punctuation problem
, with
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 95%, 79%, 54% and 58, at 1980, 1990, 2000 and 2010, respectively. For the
trucks
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, people in
American
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America
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 brought
up
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apply
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up the rear for the lowest at 5% in 1980, 16% in 2000 and 14% in the
last
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 year.
However
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, the
trucks
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 lost the least position in 1990
Punctuation problem
, which
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which
Correct word choice
when
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SUVs
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 were the the less in
this
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 year.
Although
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 the percentages of
SUVs
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were
Verb problem
did
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 not
existing
Wrong verb form
exist
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 in 1980, the proportions of
SUVs
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 continuously increased
with
Change preposition
by
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 6% in 1990, 30% in 2000 and
ending
Wrong verb form
ended
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 at 28% in the
last
Linking Words
 given year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trucks, suvs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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