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Writing Samples
Band 1

More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reason for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Today, many types of animals are about to
be
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become
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 extinct and others are in
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an endangerous
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endangerous
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endangered
 position. There are
variety
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a variety
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 of
reason
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reasons
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to
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for
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 the current situation
and
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, and
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 things can be done to solve the issue.
Firstly
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, the main reason that leads to
extinction
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the extinction
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 of wildlife is
hunting
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the hunting
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 of animals
in
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on
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endangered
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the endangered
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 list.
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, in Kazakhstan, there is
ongoing
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an ongoing
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 shooting of white tigers
which
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, which
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 are already less than one thousand
of
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in
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quantity
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number
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.
Moreover
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,
widespread
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the widespread
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of
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use of
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 fishing
industrial is
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industry
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 speaks volumes. It is a known fact that tons of species have been
gotten
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apply
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caught and
being
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are becoming
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 lessened day by day. In order to solve
this
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,
government
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the government
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 should intervene and start to
process
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pass
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 the law where
haunting
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hunting
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 of wild animals will be outlawed.
In addition
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, us, people, should start to nutrients
such
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 as omega not from the consumption of fishes, but from the supplements.

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coherence and structure
Plan your answer. Use four parts: intro, two body parts, and a short end. Put one main idea in each paragraph. This helps your talk stay on a clear path.
task response
Make your task clear. Say the problem, name main causes, and give one or two ways to fix. End with a short note.
coherence and structure
Use simple linking words to connect parts. Words like first, next, also, but, so help the flow.
task response
Give one real example for each main idea. It can be a country or a fact like hunting or over-fishing.
content
You talk about the issue and a plan to help.
content
You name a place and give a real idea of how people can help.
content
You suggest changes in law and in eating habits as a solution.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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