In some countries,owning a home rather than renting one is very importent for people. Why might this be case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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for many
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rather than
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an argument
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will express my opinion.
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one hand, many
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believe that owning a
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is essential for
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for many reasons.
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other
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, owning a
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it
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apply
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is
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a dream
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for every family to feel safe and to make sure about their kids
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in
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addition, many family try to
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a
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and
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pay
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more money from their income only to get a
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.
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some
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believe that owning a
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is
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better
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because
if
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buy
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they
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their many
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the
rent
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.
on
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other
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the other
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hand, many family think
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investment
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better than
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a
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.
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possible to say that
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money in
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anything
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can make to person other
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that
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can
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lead to
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the income
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the person can puy a
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in
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a confortable
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confortable
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comfortable
way without any pressure.
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, in some countries the price of
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home
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a home
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is too high
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people
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is
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apply
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tend to rent
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home
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retired
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than
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then
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they
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go
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to
countryside
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the countryside
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to find less price. In
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conclusion
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this
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believe
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owing
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a
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have
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more
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positive
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for instance
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,
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your money in
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money in your
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home
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for
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is
beeter
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better
than
rent
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