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The chart shows the precentage of fuel from renewable energy used in the transport sector in six European unions in 2009 and 2009, compared to the avarage

The chart shows the precentage of fuel from renewable energy used in the transport sector in six European unions in 2009 and 2009, compared to the avarage
The line graph compares how much petrol was spent
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transports
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transport
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 among six European countries from 2009 to 2010, comparatively
standart
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standard
.
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, the countries as Slovakia, Australia, France and Poland consumed
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more
non-fossil based
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non-fossil-based
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fuels
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 than
midpoint
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.
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apply
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 Spain and Greece expanded until
limit
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wich
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set as the norm.  As the graph shows, considered as ordinary spending
the
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fuels
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 4,1% for 2010 and 4,9% for 2010. There were countries
wich
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 used more clean energy as
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fuels
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fuel
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 than typically. Regarding to
expanture
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expansion
 of
suistanable
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sustainable
 fuel in Slovakia was 9,5% in 2009. And followed a considerable fall to 7,9% in 2010. In
terns
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 of consumption of Australia was 6,2% in 2009. Afterwards, it experienced a small decrease to 5,1% in 2010. Turning to France
the
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 usage of clean
fuels
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 was 6% between 2009 and 2010. Regarding Poland
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% biofuels
spent
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were spent
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 in 2009. There was a considerable increase to 6% in 2010.
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,
just
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 Spain could
utilize
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utilise
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 the
fuels
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 as
standart
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standard
. It was
initially
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 3,3% in
2009
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 after that it
rised
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rose
 significantly to 4,9% in 2010. In terms of Greece was consumed 1,1% green
fuels
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in
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were consumed in
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 2009. There was a slight growth
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 2% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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