The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.

The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.
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that
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the proportion of three different
registrated
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registered
vehicles
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for business use in the US from 1970 to 2010.
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,
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registered commercial vehicle was truck, the second one was
taxi
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taxis
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and
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the lowest one was
Bus
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buses
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. The proportion was maintained during the two decades. The most of vehicle used for business was truck, the proportion was nearly 50% of total
vehicles
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in 1970, and it droped to 30% in 1980, and
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the
ratio
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increase slightly to over 40% in 2010. The
ratio
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of
taxi
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was over 20% of total
vehicles
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in 1970
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the number fluctuated between 10 to 40 percent and it was over 30% of total commercial use
vehicles
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in 2010. The
ratio
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of
bus
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was lower 10% in 1970
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the number grew to approximately 15% in
1980
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with a
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continuous
fall afterwards. The
ratio
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in 2010 was even lower than
1970
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in 1970
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, ratio with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • vehicle registrations
  • commercial vehicles
  • share
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • patterns
  • growth
  • decline
  • advances in technology
  • economic conditions
  • government policy
  • logistics
  • transportation needs
  • industry standards
  • environmental impact
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