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The bar chart below shows the number of research students studying different subject in 2005.

The bar chart below shows the number of research students studying different subject in 2005.
The bar chart illustrates how many research
students
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 enrolled in various subjects by
genders
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gender
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 in 2005.
Overall
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, psychology, natural sciences and mathematics each accounted for
largest
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 number among males,
while
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 linguistics was the least popular major. As for female
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, only natural sciences
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 the most interesting subject, and mathematics
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had
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 the smallest figure in 2005. Reccording for males, the number of psychology, natural sciences and mathematics each had 200 learners
particepated
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participate
, which was higher than that of engineering and programming, with 50
students
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. After that, there were fewer than 100
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 joined
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lingilsics
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linguistics
. In terms of
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females
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, natural
sciencs
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sciences
also
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 had 200
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, followed by psychology, with approximately 170
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. linguistics, engineering and programming ranged from around 70 to 110 learners, and
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linguistics accounted for
largest
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the largest
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 among the three subjects. Notably, the number of
mathematis
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mathematicians
 was
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fewer than 50
students
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, which was
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 opposite pattern
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compared to
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with
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males in 2005.

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