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The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart displays the types of media that people of different
age
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groups
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use
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 to get daily
news
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 in one country in 2011. There are five different
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groups
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. The differences in media usage regarding daily
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 are quite staggering.
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, radio is most common for acquiring daily
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.
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 is particularly true for the older population. Social Networks are heavily used in the younger generations,
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 they are not favoured in the older generations. First of all, the youngest
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, 10 to 17 and 18 to 29, are the heaviest users of social networks. 80 per
cent
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 of them
use
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this
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 source to get their daily
news
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.
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 figure declines rapidly with the next
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group
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 (30 to 49), where only 47 per
cent
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 of them
use
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 medium for daily
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.
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 figure declines more and more over the next two
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groups
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, with a figure of 10 per
cent
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 of the people 65 and older. It is quite interesting that 93 per
cent
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 of the 18 to 25
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group
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 get their daily
news
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 from the radio.
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 is quite a big surge compared to the
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group
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 10-17, where only 20 per
cent
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use
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this
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 media to get daily
news
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. The usage of radio as a daily
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 source stays constant over the next
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groups
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with
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 only a modest decline for the
age
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group
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 65+.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, use, news, cent, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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