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The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart demonstrated the
medias
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media
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 that
people
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in
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 different ages used for getting news in a nation in 2011.
Overall
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, there are three types of media
and
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, and
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 the percentage of
perference
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preference
were
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was
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 different in each age
categories
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category
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. Mainly, elderly
person
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people
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prefered
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preferred
get
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to get
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 news on
radio
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the radio
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, and teenagers relied on social networks.
Main
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user
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users
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 of
micro blogging
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microblogging
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 were those who are 18 to 29
years
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old
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old,
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 young
people
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,
it
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who
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was
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made
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20
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up 20
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percent
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per cent
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 of
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people
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the people
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used
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who used
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this
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 way, which was almost
same
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the same
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 as those teenagers under 18
years
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 old. The
perference
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preference
was
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decreased continuously when
people
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 became old, and the ratio almost became zero in groups of 65
years
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 plus. The primary
of
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radio
user
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users
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 include three groups of
people
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 from 18
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years
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apply
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to 64
years
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 old, and
it
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there
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 was
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a slightly
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slightly
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 drop in the group after 65
years
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 old, but it was only 40
percent
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per cent
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teenagers
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of teenagers
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 under 18
years
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 got news by radio. 80
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 who followed social networks, the highest proportion was those young
people
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 under 29
years
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 old. The percentage eventually fell to almost zero in
group
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a group
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 of 65 plus.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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