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Now a days, Many People have to work longer hours, and then feel more stressed out than before. What are the reasons for stress at the workplace? What can employer do to make their employee's life easier?

In recent times, many people are more stressed out than ever before,
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 has been
due to
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 long working conditions. The constant long stare at
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 screens increases stress levels for many workers.
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, employers can create a flexible
work
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 schedule that
enable
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 tasks to be done consistently,
as a result
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,
improve
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peoples
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people's
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 mental health. On the one hand, companies face many
challenged
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 when running their businesses,
imprompting
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prompting
 their
employees
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 to
work
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 long hours to achieve deliverables.There is a lot of pressure from management to create profit for their shareholders.
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, Operation administrators are required to process many incoming requests from clients in the fastest possible time.
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 means that they do not go for lunch at
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 times and it
at
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ackward
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awkward
 times of the day.
In
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additionally
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, many Information technology people
also
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 spend a lot of time monitoring systems to ensure
efficient
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 flow of machines
work
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 well.
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, regardless of the pressure from shareholders, it is the responsibility of
management
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 team to handle the welfare of the
employees
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.The executive team can begin by creating flexible working schedules that enable
work
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 to be done constantly. In
this
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 instance, company
employees
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 will
nolonger
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no longer
work
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 only between 8 am to 17 pm, but
work
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 in a
24 hour
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work
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 cycle divided into 3
8 hour
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work
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 schedules.
This
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 method has been implemented in many mines
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across
 the world
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this
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methos
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method
 helps each miner to rest and recover and be
mentaly
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mentally
 sharp. In conclusion, managing
mental
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the mental
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well being
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well-being
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 of
employees
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 by executives will enable the company to make more sustainable profits.The
less
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fewer
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 hours worked by
employees
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 will prevent a lot of mental burnout
exeperienced
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experienced
 by many
employees
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.

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structure
Plan your answer with a clear start, middle, and end. Use one idea per paragraph and link them.
content
Give clear reasons for stress and then give real steps a boss can take. This helps to show your meaning.
grammar
Use simple, correct sentences and check spelling or grammar errors.
cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas, like also, but, for example, in addition.
structure
Clear plan with intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Some good ideas on how to help workers.
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