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Many people think that the government should spend more money on providing faster and cheaper means of public transport. Some others think that there are important factors to take in consideration like (fuel,cost and environment) Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Public
transport
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 plays a vital role in the daily lives of millions of people around the world.
Wit
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 rising urban populations and increasing
transport
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 congestion, the need for effective public
transport
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 has never been greater.
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, some individuals
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 that additional considerations, including energy use, financial burden and environmental effects, are equally significant.
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 essay will discuss both views and provide a reasoned opinion. One strong argument in favour of investing in faster public
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 is that it saves people valuable time. It makes
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accessibpe
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accessible
 for everyone, especially low-income families. Significant
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 people cannot afford private vehicles
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will
 be on
te
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 road, which helps improve air quality.
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, cities
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 as Japan have successfully achieved
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 by investing in high-quality, affordable metro systems.
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 argument
point
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 out that fuel efficiency , which directly affects both the environment and the economy. Faster
transport
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 systems that run on fossil fuels consume huge amounts of energy, leading to air pollution and climate change.
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 Sri Lanka, most public buses are still powered by diesel engines
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 are not fuel-efficient and release
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 amount of smoke, especially in congested cities like Colombo and Gampaha.
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this
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 government can invest in hybrid or electric buses. In my opinion, governments should aim to improve public
transport
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 by making it both efficient and environmentally friendly. Speed and affordability make
transport
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 attractive to
user
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users
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,
ehile
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while
 fuel efficiency and environmental care make it sustainable.
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, governments should
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prioritise
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 eco-friendly and fuel-efficient
system
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systems
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. In conclusion, making public
transport
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 faster and cheaper may provide short-term benefits, but ignoring fuel and environmental
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issues
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 will create long-term issues.
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,
governmenta
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governments
 should
adapt
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 a mixed
approch
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approach
like
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provide
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 affordable services
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 investing in modern eco-friendly systems.

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cohesion
Work on making the link from one idea to the next. Use simple joining words to show how points fit together.
task
Be clear on the view you give. Start each paragraph with a main idea and stay on it.
grammar
Fix simple mistakes in spelling and word use. Check words like 'influence', 'cost', 'fuel' and 'environment' for accuracy.
content
The writer tries to show both sides and give a view at the end.
example
Some real life example from other places is used.
structure
There is an ending idea that shows what the writer thinks.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • traffic congestion
  • cost of living
  • commuting
  • environmental benefits
  • carbon emissions
  • pollution levels
  • quality of life
  • driving stress
  • reliable travel options
  • fuel efficiency
  • sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • infrastructure
  • technology upgrades
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