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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or oganisation. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

In recent times, many individuals prefer being self-employed
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 to working as an employee for an organisation.
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why
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 the case and highlight the possible downside of
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 with, many would see the type of income each business makes and may be inspired to do the same. A lot of people want to manage their own finances based on the work effort they put in and do not want to be bossed around. There is a lot of micro management in many
organisation
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 and many do not like that,
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, many choose to go the
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 way.
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, many entrepreneurs often see gaps in the market and are driven to solve those gaps in order to
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drive profit for their new start-ups.
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self reliant
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 methods to answer for their
cusomers
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customers
, and in return gain financial benefits. Unfortunately, there are disadvantages to being
self employed
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self-employed
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 , there is no backup finances when there
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 no business
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 it takes a long time to build relationships with customers.
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, people who are involved in specialist
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require going
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 around advertising their abilities so that they can gain customers.
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 it requires a lot of effort from each expert,
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 proposals requires money
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 not always available. In conclusion, I believe that being self-employed is not easy, but based on the various reasons stated
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 can be moved to opt for that. The disadvantages experienced are part of the process of being
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self-reliant
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.

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task response
Expand each idea with a short example and explain how it affects work life.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and contrast (for example, 'first', 'also', 'however').
grammar
Check spelling and grammar; keep sentences short and clear.
structure
Intro states topic and aim.
content
Some good reasons and a clear view on disadvantages.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • entrepreneurship
  • freelancing
  • gig economy
  • flexible schedule
  • job market instability
  • financial independence
  • work-life balance
  • economic downturn
  • irregular income
  • employer-provided benefits
  • job security
  • passion projects
  • accounting
  • marketing
  • isolation
  • legal requirements
  • tax obligations
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