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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Throughout the centuries,
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treatments
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 and medicines have existed in ancient countries. In recent years, an increasing number of
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 argue that
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 remedies or
treatments
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 are better than seeking a doctor’s help for a cure.
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, I believe that without any professional approach to illness, it can create a big disaster. In
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 will be discussed. One main reason
people
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 still prefer
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treatments
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 is that they often work for minor illnesses
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 as fever or flu.
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, in poverty-stricken countries
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 as those in Africa or Central Asia,
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 suffer from a lack of professional doctors and specialists.
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, for some populations in
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 regions, the only remaining option is to choose
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treatment
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 as the best way to cure illnesses.
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, many
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 believe that
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treatment
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 cannot help every individual. In
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 case, professional medical support is needed.
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, patients with cancer or heart disease cannot rely on herbal remedies, as these conditions require advanced medical intervention.
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treatment
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 may be effective only for mild health issues, but in critical situations, professional doctors are indispensable.
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,
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treatment
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 is not scientifically proven, and relying on it alone might put
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’s health at serious risk. In conclusion,
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treatment
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 might have some benefits;
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, its effectiveness depends on the level of illness. I believe that the best way to cure diseases is to get support from professionals. In the future, the best results may be achieved through a combined use of
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 and professional
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task
Be clear on your view. State your main idea in one sentence and keep to it.
task
Add one or two simple facts or real life examples to back each idea.
coherence
Make the idea flow easy. Use link words to move from one idea to the next.
content
The essay shows two sides and a final view.
structure
There is a clear end that mixed care can be good.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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