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The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 ann 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 ann 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the
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The
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 chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the yearly number
in
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of
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 leasing and selling (in various formats) films from a store between 2002 and 2011.
Overall
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,
Dvd
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DVD
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sales
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 had
a
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an
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up
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upward
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 trend throughout the years. Rentals dominated the chart in 2002 and the following year,
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but it
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it
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they
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 had decreased gradually since
then
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 and dropped from approximately 185k rentals to a bit more than 50k in 2011.
In contrast
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,
Dvd
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DVD
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sales
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sky rocketed
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in
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from
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 2003
onwards
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apply
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to
2007
Punctuation problem
2007,
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 from less than 50k to more than 210k.
howerver
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However
, it had a
slightly
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slight
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down trend
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downtrend
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 from 2007 to 2011
which
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, which
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 is a 30k drop.
However
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,
Vhs
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VHS
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sales
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 and
Bluray
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Blu-ray
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sales
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 were the most inconsistent in the chart. On the one hand,VHS
sales
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 dropped from slightly more than 80k in 2002 to approximately 10k in 2005 and completely
disapeared
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disappeared
 in the next year.
On the other hand
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,
sales
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 of the
blurays
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Blu-rays
 started to appear
since
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in
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 2007 at close to none to almost reached 20k in 2011.
Therefore
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, it can be
reffered
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referred
 from the statistics that DVD
sales
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 have
most
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the highest annual
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sales
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 annualy followed by the leases, the VHS
sales
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,
BLurays
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and the Blu-ray
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sales
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 throughout the years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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