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In many countries, school-age children are spending their free time in doing homework. Is it a good or bad thing? What is your opinion? Give examples to support your view.

In many Nations ,
Pupil
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 are spending their free
time
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to do
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 duties
of
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 the educational institutions .
Although
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 the letter is beneficial in many different cases . I believe that spending
the
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time
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 out of school
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doing hobbies , family , friends or doing anything else . I consider the
time
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 out of school is free for students to do the
funny
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staff
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stuff
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 or to learn something new
to
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 both
of
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female
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and
male
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. A
lots
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 of boys like to spend their
time
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with
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playing football or any kind of sports .
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,
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girls
,
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like to spend
time
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 with family or meeting each other
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furthermore
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 , hanging out to buy new
staff
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stuff
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content
Answer the question directly. State if homework in free time is good or bad, and why you think so.
structure
Make a plan. Use three parts: intro, body with your view, short conclusion.
cohesion
Use simple link words to show how ideas fit, like and, but, also, so, because.
examples
Give one or two clear examples to back your view.
language
Check grammar. Look at verb form, plural, and article use.
content
The writer shows some idea about time outside school.
effort
There is a real effort to talk about the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • time management
  • stress and burnout
  • mental health
  • holistic development
  • extracurricular activities
  • parental involvement
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • reinforces
  • understanding
  • valuable skill
  • engage
  • inequitable
  • resources
  • support
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