the line graph shows various types of technology used in US from 1995-1999. write main features and give comparison where necessary

the line graph shows various types of technology used in US from 1995-1999. write main features and give comparison where necessary
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The line graph illustrates various types of
household
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households
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used in
United
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the United
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State
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States
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from 1995 to 1999. From an
overall
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view, it is evident that there was a huge growth in every
technologies
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technology
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that individuals use. It can be seen from the graph that during the late 90s washing machine
is
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was
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a must-have household
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due
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item due
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to the high demand
of
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for
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laundry
and
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, and
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the number exceeded 60 and
still
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apply
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continue
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continued
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to 80 per cent in 1999.
Meanwhile
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the DVD player is the least
favorite
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favourite
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by individuals
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, as
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as
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with
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fewer than 40
percentage
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per cent
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of usage. It is
noticable
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noticeable
that technologies
such
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as phone, computer, DVD player and Internet weren't popular at the time.
However
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, these numbers are dramatically rising over the years as
the
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apply
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society
developed
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develops
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. Over half of the technologies
usage
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used
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are
phone
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phones
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and
computer
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computers
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.
Therefore
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, the proportion of the Internet
also
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grew
along with
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the new gadgets, and rapidly
catching
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caught
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up with them.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • grow fast
  • steady
  • rapid
  • sharp
  • gradual
  • high
  • low
  • gap
  • compare
  • between
  • from
  • to
  • year
  • year by year
  • line
  • graph
  • data
  • technology
  • computer
  • phone
  • internet
  • video game
  • television
  • use
  • usage
  • highest
  • lowest
  • period
  • 1995
  • 1999
  • trend
  • overall
  • pattern
  • different
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